The revision is certainly an improvement - it doesn't take half an hour to read which is a good start. Not sure you need to have the DOG
when the logo is placed in the middle of the screen too.
So here's some not rude, positive, feedback, take it as you will - in most style guides, ellipsis (...) are three dots - https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellipsis
- four is often acceptable but two is at least one short.
Agreed. If I see two dots anywhere I just presume someone has made a mistake and pressed the fullstop too many times.
Hmmm..... Those are all of what I, as a human after all, feels is the rude, negative feedback you have given me. Are you happy now revision 1 is here? WITH A SMALLER MESSAGE??
I wouldn't see any of the comments you quoted here as rude. For example, (although I cannot speak on his behalf) I read dbl's comment as saying that there isn't really much to the design as it is, after all, text on a black background. Critique is meant to be harsh but helpful. Comments like from Neil Jones regarding signposting channel 3 are exactly this.
If you don't want to take advice then what is the point in posting here? If you're willing to take on feedback then you will get somewhere with the design as even 20 pairs of eyes will notice lots of issues that you wouldn't yourself.
EDIT - Just noticed your ITV mock on here too. I would suggest working on one thing at a time rather than trying to juggle 2 projects. The graphics are average but the alignment is off, they aren't 16:9 safe and the gradients - they're not really 'fashionable' or a 'design trend' now.