I'd just like to kindly point out that I'm not a graphic designer nor a videographer. I am in fact a radio presenter so this is something that I do whilst I'm off air on weekends at home. I've been creating mocks for seven years and as a result, I have gained over 4,184,675 views on my YouTube channel 'DeMarkay Williams'.
You all have a TV background and I have a Radio background so this is a hobby.
None of us were attacking you personally. No need to get so defensive.
In my opinion it doesn't improve at all on what is currently on offer. The execution of the headline sequence (as already mentioned) is quite good but the ending is poor.