The title card is spot on...
...however, white text on an orange background only works when the areas of solid colour are large, the logo seems to disappear when its smaller especially when on an orange background. I recommend you use an additional colour other than the orange... purple is always good *smirks*
Change the text... 3d text or text with a keyline does not work on Astons, the text is too small to be anything other than a solid colour. Bearing in mind your text must be ledgible on small TV screens. It should also be high contrast to its background.
Why does the ticker stop at the edge of the clock? ...you have space... why does it not go right the way across the screen? ...the only reason to stop it is if there is something in the way.
You seem to be taking on board the information we are sharing, and improving your mocks as a result, so good work there, but still a long way to go.
...I have again DAYBREAK fatigue, no more Daybreak mocks please TV Forum.
Constructive feedback welcome!
...you don't get to choose what sort of feedback you get.