Hello all. After several months of GCSE prep, I have finally found the time to come back to working on my mocks. I was unable to post in the old thread, which is why I have created a new one.
Please don't split the clock like that, it's not very intuitive. Use a proper format (6:05 or 06:05) for ease of viewing.
The font is inappropriate (IMO), the text is bordering on unreadable on the lighter side of the gradients and why is there a big gap between the bottom ticker (I presume its a ticker) and the strap? The semi-circle isn't a straight curve and to my eye it looks lop-sided in the square.
OT: Why do people keep designing things on flourescent green backgrounds? It looks hideous, and messes up how we see the colour and detail in the rest of the image.
Yeah, you might need it for when you key it onto a YouTube video someone else captured in a cracked version of Vegas, but that doesn't mean you need to design and present your stills like that here.
OT: Why do people keep designing things on flourescent green backgrounds? It looks hideous, and messes up how we see the colour and detail in the rest of the image.
Yeah, you might need it for when you key it onto a YouTube video someone else captured in a cracked version of Vegas, but that doesn't mean you need to design and present your stills like that here.
I do sometimes wonder if the votes on this site are broken - because there's no way this deserves 2 stars.
It's piss poor, and one still. If you're serious about it you'll go back to the drawing board and start over.
The logo looks like a dingbat of a breast implant, the font is wholly unusable for the purpose you're trying to use it for (and is far from aesthetically pleasing) - you need to remember that television serves a wide array of audiences, including those with sight problems. How can some of those with such problems be expected to comfortably read that typography? The clock is also confusing, where and when have you seen the time represented (in any medium except for analogue clocks) on two levels?
A simple gradient oblong thrown next to a white one with the font aligned to two opposing sides isn't good either.
In a nutshell it's rubbish.
Last edited by Mike W on 28 December 2017 4:15pm - 2 times in total
I do sometimes wonder if the votes on this site are broken - because there's no way this deserves 2 stars.
It's piss poor, and one still. If you're serious about it you'll go back to the drawing board and start over.
The logo looks like a dingbat of a breast implant, the font is wholly unusable for the purpose you're trying to use it for (and is far from aesthetically pleasing) - you need to remember that television serves a wide array of audiences, including those with sight problems. How can some of those with such problems be expected to comfortably read that typography? The clock is also confusing, where and when have you seen the time represented (in any medium except for analogue clocks) on two levels?
A simple gradient oblong thrown next to a white one with the font aligned to two opposing sides isn't good either.
In a nutshell it's rubbish.
Looks like the two stars have since been removed since this post.
You need to think about some basics before trying to get too ahead of yourself.
You have used a gradient of red and yellowy-orange. The white text is perfectly visible on the red background, but on the yellowy-orange, it is hard to read. This isn't an appropriate gradient to use for this reason.
The clock is bizarrely laid-out. Think about programmes you have seen on television where there is a digital clock within the graphics. Sky News, BBC News, The Wright Stuff, Good Morning Britain - do any of these split the hour and minutes over two lines? Keep the clock in the standard X:XX format - it'll only confuse viewers otherwise.
The logo needs a lot of work. It's a wonky semi circle and nothing else. Again, take inspiration from other places - logos and pieces of design you find attractive. They don't even have to be television themed. Sometimes I get ideas for mocks from seeing how a certain brand presents themselves.
Think about typeface choice. BBC Breakfast used Helvetica, Good Morning Britain uses ITV Reem, The Wright Stuff uses Eurostile, Sky News uses Sky Text - they are all characterful and attractive typeface choices which are still easy to read at a glance. Your typeface seems very basic and thin to me. I think you would benefit from sitting down and really thinking about which typeface would suit your mock best. Don't just pick one because it looks nice in the drop-down box. Type some mock headlines and locations and times into your graphics and see how the typeface actually looks when displaying the information you want to convey.
Please, take on board feedback. The whole point of The Gallery is for posters to critique others' work, and for the 'mocker' to alter their work accordingly in order to improve it.
I can only reiterate what everyone else has said. If you pay attention to the comments people have left on your previous mocks and this one then you will get somewhere. You may not like the feedback but if not then what is the point of posting? The feedback people give is designed to give you some ideas to make the mock better and most importantly, broadcast worthy.
I would ask how much time you spent on this mock as it appears to be rushed. I always say that when you finish making something you'll be proud of it and think it's great no matter what because you've just spent the last 2 days on it. If you leave it for a few days or weeks then come back to it you will notice the imperfections and be able to improve the mock based on your previous ideas.
Maybe start by doing some rough designs or sketches of about 5 different graphic packages, look back at them, improve them, decide which is the best then move forward with that. Decide on colour schemes - it's very rare you see gradients these days as people tend to prefer block colours or very subtle gradients which are easier on there eye. Choose a design which if you saw without the logo, you would still recognise as being related to your brand. Using something consistent throughout the design also helps such as ITV News' graphics all being based on a squares design which runs from the logo to the straps to the title sequence.
I hope you take people's feedback on board and maybe show us more next time than an image as it doesn't really give us much to judge. For example if someone just showed me the ITV news straps then I would probably think they were pretty basic and a strange design with different sized squares but when shown with the rest of the package it makes sense.
I do sometimes wonder if the votes on this site are broken - because there's no way this deserves 2 stars.
It's piss poor, and one still. If you're serious about it you'll go back to the drawing board and start over.
The logo looks like a dingbat of a breast implant, the font is wholly unusable for the purpose you're trying to use it for (and is far from aesthetically pleasing) - you need to remember that television serves a wide array of audiences, including those with sight problems. How can some of those with such problems be expected to comfortably read that typography? The clock is also confusing, where and when have you seen the time represented (in any medium except for analogue clocks) on two levels?
A simple gradient oblong thrown next to a white one with the font aligned to two opposing sides isn't good either.
In a nutshell it's rubbish.
You will be pleased to hear then that its down to 1 star
